Today, many people do not know their neighbours. Why is this? What can be done about this?

As it is clearly observed
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these days, many family living in modern society do not know their nearest
neighbours
. There are many underlying verification why
this
phenomenon happened, and several methods can be solutions for
this
happening. By all accounts, many
family
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families
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don’t tend to be interested in other public for many information.
To begin
with, families have become nuclear families,
it
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makes
community
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have individualism because society couldn’t learn the value and culture of living together from the big family. On top of that, folk become tired when they make
neighbours
because the tendency for frequent relocations to other places, which have a lot of infrastructure for many
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like educational purposes, is increasing compared to the past.
As a consequence
, with increasing individualism and frequent moving,
crowd
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have less sympathy
in
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the nearest folk.
According to
research by the government of South Korea, many young generations show a low importance in their neighbourhood compared to older generations. With all due consideration, there are many ways to make
community
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become interested in their neighbourhood. First and foremost, local
community
groups should help
community
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the community
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to activate their interaction by providing a space to gather
neighbours
.
For example
, making a space in a local
community
to share their own talent freely can lead to having
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and interacting with
neighbours
.
In addition
, making a
community
group caring for their children and sharing educational information with other
neighbours
can raise their enthusiasm in the neighbourhood.
Last
but not least, if the government hosts an event regularly
for gathering
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local
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community
, it can help to raise the chance of having an interest in local society by meeting periodically. In conclusion,
it is clear that
many
community
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communities
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have become less interested in their
neighbours
because of several
confirmation
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, and there are diverse solutions to solve
this
phenomenon.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • neighbourhood bonds
  • social media connectivity
  • urban lifestyle
  • online relationships
  • fast-paced society
  • privacy concerns
  • communal relations
  • individualism
  • transient societies
  • expatriates
  • cultural shift
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