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Today, many people do not know their neighburs in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighburs #cities
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Nowadays, many people
who
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apply
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live
nearly
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near
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 together but they
don
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do
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 not know
anythings
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anything
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 about
anybod
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anything
 in large cities. As a reason, it
cause
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causes
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 a lot of negative
things
.
Amount
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The amount
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 of
things
 is
communition
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communication
,
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and relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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. Many times, they do not have the idea together and have many
aluement
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elements
.
Besides
, everyone should do something to have a good
relationship
 with their neighbours. The
problem
 that everyone
have
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has
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 but they do not know
that
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what
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 they are doing cause a lot of
problem
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problems
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. It
is mean
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means
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 that many
reltionship
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relationship
relationships
 break
ot
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out
 because they do not care,
attend
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or attend
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 very much. Many
house
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houses
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 which can beside or opposite but they do not know tht how many people, what their
name
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names
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, when
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are, when
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 can
you
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apply
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hang out with
me
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them
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, and many
things
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other things
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.
however
,
i
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I
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 think it is a normal thing in the
relationship
. Because they are insensitive to
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those around
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around
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around them
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, they need to do for
theirlifestyle
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their lifestyle
 to become more creative and perfect
more
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apply
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.
Bt
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But
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 they are
forgoten
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forgotten
 to care
to
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for
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 neighbours. I think that the simple solution
that
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which
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 is
the
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apply
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communication, perfectly tackles the
problem
.
Although
 it is simple, it is very important. They can say bid when they go out or
comeback
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come back
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their
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to their
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 home, sometimes give small gifts after you have
an
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a
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 happy occasion,
hang
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and hang
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 out together. It is very
simpe
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simple
 but it is simplified but it is various to do
many
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much
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 communication to become comfortable. Or
many
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any
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time
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times
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, they can help together when having
a
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apply
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difficult
about
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apply
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living
condition
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conditions
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 as
no
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not
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 have money,
take
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to take
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 care of their child. Many
things
is
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are
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opportunity
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an opportunity
the opportunity
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 for a good
relationship
 when you know the
way
 to improve it. We have many
way
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ways
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 to solve a
problem
. And it is the most
importion
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important
 how to have a
reasionable
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reasonable
way
 for
this
problem
. In there, the neighbours
is
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are
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 very
popularity
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popular
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 with everyone. And the
way
 is
many
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much
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 communication to improve
relationship
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the relationship
a relationship
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.
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Your essay partially addresses the task prompt, but the ideas are not fully developed or comprehensive. Work on expanding your explanation of the problems caused by not knowing neighbors and suggest specific, practical measures that could improve this situation.
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