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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living stanndards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, a lot of
money
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 is invested in
research
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space
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. Major of people believe that
money
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 should be spent on making the quality of
life
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 on
Earth
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 better. I agree partly with
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 opinion and will explain in the following paragraph. The first thing must be mentioned that living standard is one of the important things that people have to spend more
money
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 on improving. Human is living on the
Earth
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 and the
Earth
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 is our home, we have to improve our home.
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, we can improve several services that support people in their lives.
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, healthcare is one of the problems in many countries, the government do not pay attention to that field and it makes
life
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 in that country worse. Another point from my view is that
research
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space
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 is now a scientific subject. Some exploration in
space
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 can be useful to support us in improving
life
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 on
Earth
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. Because it is science, every achievement can be applied to another science field or
life
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. The advantages it brings can be very large
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 the
money
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 that they invest in if it is successful. Take the USA as an example, which spends a large amount of
money
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 on
space
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research
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 and that country has created some scientific achievements like a satellite that can bring 4G and 5G.
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, spending
money
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 on
space
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research
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 can have a lot of benefits but we
also
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 pay attention to the
life
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 standard.

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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that your introduction clearly establishes your position and that your conclusion effectively summarizes your essay without introducing new points.
task achievement
Develop your arguments more thoroughly and provide specific, detailed examples to support your points. Focus on fully answering the question and providing a balanced view when agreeing partly.
coherence cohesion
Increase the logical flow of your essay by using a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by elaboration and examples.
task achievement
Provide clearer and more sophisticated examples to illustrate your arguments. Develop your points to ensure that your examples are directly tied to your main points and relevant to the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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