The graph below shos the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparizons where relevant.

The graph below shos the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparizons where relevant.
The line chart compares the number of
stores
that shut down and new entry
stores
in the market in a specific nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the number of
stores
that decided to close their business accounted for more than the total of business that just entered the market over the period, except in the first year. Turning first the total of
stores
opening in 2018, stood at around 8,500
then
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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dramatically to just under 4,000 in 2012 but rebounded by roughly 50% in 2014. Until the
last
recorded year, 2018, the total of opening
stores
had decreased gradually to 3,000, which was the lowest point in the trend.
On the other hand
, stood at around 6,500, The total of
stores
that shut down had fluctuated before
fall
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falling
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significantly to just under 1,000 in 2015,
then
rebounded dramatically to roughly 5,000 until the end of the following year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Retail trends
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Closure
  • Inauguration/opening
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Notable dip
  • Substantial growth
  • Consumer habits
  • Market dynamics
  • Economic indicators
  • Commercial landscape
  • Technological disruption
  • E-commerce impact
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