The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

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The two pie charts provide information about the

overall

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global

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utilization and

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production in the previous year.

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, the majority of consumed

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last

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year came from

oil

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. Among the seven source categories, the coal industry provided the largest electrical power supply worldwide. It is noticeable that more than a quarter of

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used worldwide was produced by crude

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at 34%.

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coal and gas accounted for almost identical figures of 25.1% and 20.9% respectively, combustible renewables and waste were just 10.6% of the total consumed

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. Looking closely at the figures for

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generation, clearly, coal accounted for the highest proportion of generated

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at 39.8%.

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is followed by natural gas which created 19.6% of total world

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produced. The percentage of power supply generation using

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was not proportional to its consumption, as few as 6.7% was generated using

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reserves. Water and nuclear sources were

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considerably greater in terms of generation compared to consumption 16.1% and 15.7%.

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, there are other resources for both supply and use but it was just a marginal figure.

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, there was no

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that was produced

last

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year using renewable combustions and wastes.

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