The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Finding better options for energy sources
have
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become one of the major concerns in today's
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world
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.
This
essay totally agrees with that statement as it will help to prevent massive air pollution happening
due to
fossil
fuels
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fuel
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burn
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and to address the
neccessity
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necessity
of owning a reliable power source once the fossil
fuels
are over.
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with,
currently
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human beings are facing lots of
difficulities
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difficulties
due to
air pollution and the primary cause of
this
issue is the excessive CO2 emission
occurs
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that occurs
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as a result
of fossil fuel burning which ultimately leads the people
exposed
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into
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polluted air
inhaltion
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inhalation
resulting
lung
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diseases.
Moreover
, the
Co2
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CO2
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emmited
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emitted
through petroleum burn
precipitate
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the
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global warming leaving human beings
into
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a
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enormous amount of problems
such
as
sea
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the sea
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level
rising
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and
increaisng
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increasing
atmospheric temperature.
For instance
, at
present
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most of the developed countries have introduced public
transporation
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transportation
systems
such
as trains
inorder
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in order
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to minimize
the
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CO2
emission
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emissions
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by reducing individual vehicles.
Furthermore
, it is a common truth that in the near future, fossil
fules
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fuels
will be
vasnished
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banished
from the entire world.
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, to overcome
such
situation
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a situation
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man kind
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mankind
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has to find out a better source of energy as soon as possible as it plays a versatile role in our daily
livings
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lives
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.
For example
,
petoleum
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petroleum
and
disel
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diesel
are consumed by most of the global transport system at present and no
any
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other sources of power
is
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are
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able to outrace the work done by fossil
fuels
. In conclusion, global citizens should seek
for
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a better alternative power source as
due to
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the availability of fossil
fuels
are
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is
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going to be
deminished
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diminished
in the future and the
enviromental
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environmental
pollution
exagerated
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exaggerated
by the end product
it
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apply
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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