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This pie charts show deegrees granted in the National University between 1990 and 2010.

This pie charts show deegrees granted in the National University between 1990 and 2010.
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This
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These
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pie
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 charts show
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the deegrees
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deegrees
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degrees
 granted
in
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by
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 the National University between 1990 and 2010. As
it
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apply
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presented in the
pie
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 charts,
Computer
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Scince
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science
 was the only
degree
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, that did not decrease. Comparing 1990's
Computer
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Degree
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 and 2010's
Computer
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Degree
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, the highest per cent was in 2010,
that is
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 around a half respectively. Meanwhile, the
degree
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 for
Computer
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 Science in 1990
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 nearly one-
third,
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which is
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as a
degree
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for
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in
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 Business. So
according to
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 the
pie
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 charts,
the
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apply
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Computer
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 Science increased
for
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by
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 15
percent
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per cent
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between
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over
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 twenty years. Now, turning to the
2000's
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2000
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pie
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 chart,
it is clear that
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 the
Computer
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Science's
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Science
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degree
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 is
twicely
Correct your spelling
twice
 more
than
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as
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 the
degree
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for
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in
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the
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apply
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Business,
whereas
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 just over a third.
Furthermore
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, the
degree
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for
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in
show examples
the
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apply
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Medicine
shows
Verb problem
is
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 thirty per cent which is nearly a third. The
degree
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 for
the
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apply
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Law has a tiny minority out of all degrees not only in
2000s
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the 2000s
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, computer, degree with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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