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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is how to be good
members
 of
society
. It is undeniable that
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adequate
behavior
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 in
society
 has become an essential part of our life,
However
, there is no absolute agreement on
whether
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who should
be teach
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 children good
behavior
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parents
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 or teachers at school. A commonly held belief is that school is the place to learn how to be good
members
 of
society
. As evidence of
this
 they point to commuting with peers and teachers you would be more conscious and responsible for your own actions.
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Furthermore
, being at school
help
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 to develop your leadership qualities. It could be explained by the fact that other people would not
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 your bad acts and teachers could
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teach what means
good
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members
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.
As a result
, it leads to
while
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learning what
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that
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,
also
 they can practice in their own experience.
On the other hand
, some people claim that people who teach
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 good
members
 of
society
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parents
.
For example
, they may mention that your
parents
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know you best, and know what teach you.
In addition
, they have gone through a lot of
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 in their experience. The explanation lies in the fact that they can give
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what
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 to do in
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situation
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.
Therefore
,
parents
 can help to learn how to be integrity in
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 atmosphere. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would
agrue
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argue
agree
 that all
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 rules and warnings have to
be teach
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 by
parents
 from
early
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ages
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. In
this
case
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 they can
grow
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childre
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children
 who
has
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 a
good tempered
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 manner in
social
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a social
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 environment.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that is expanded upon with relevant examples and explanations. Strive for a more varied use of cohesive devices beyond simple linking words to enhance the flow of the essay.
Task Achievement
Task achievement could be improved by providing more specific examples and ensuring that both sides of the argument are explored fully before giving a reasoned conclusion. The opinion should be clearly stated and backed by solid arguments and examples.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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