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Band 6.5

You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter •Explain what type of car you would like • Give details of when you would like the car • Request more information about the cost

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Dear Mr Hung, I am writing
this
 letter to enquire about a car which I want to rent in order to go on a summer break with my family for a weeklong.
Initially
, I need a comfortable four-wheeler cab that has full facilities and multimedia on the move with 7 seats
while
 we go to Dalat Highlands. I think an SUV highlander
is apply
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 suitable for us and would like to know about other alternatives from you as well. Our plan will be to take on the 10th of July 2023- 16th of July 2023 and will be handed over the car to you by the next day.
Similarly
, I request about the price
for
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 hiring the car. Could you please send me detailed information on the cost of
7-seat
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 cab vehicle for 7 days in the rental? I am looking forward to your information
for
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 an SUV and hope to hear from you as soon as possible so that I can manage our trip promptly. Yours sincerely,
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that ideas are presented in a logical order with clear paragraphing. One idea per paragraph is ideal, but it is also important to ensure that the ideas are sequentially and coherently linked throughout the letter.
task achievement
Complete all parts of the task with relevant, extended and supported ideas. For task achievement, you should not only specify the type of car, dates, and ask for the cost, but also potentially elaborate more on the purpose of the rental or specific requirements you might have.
lexical resource
Use a range of vocabulary appropriate for the context, including specific terms about the car rental and any particular features you require. Try to showcase variety in your vocabulary while avoiding repetition where possible.
grammatical range and accuracy
Ensure the use of complex sentence structures and varied grammatical forms while maintaining accuracy. Minor lapses are permissible but try to reduce the number of errors in your writing.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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