The given pie chart illustrates data on transport and car use in Edmonton and table explains people's reasons for using the car in city.
The pie chart shows information about
car’s
types. And Change noun form
car
table
shows reasons why Correct article usage
the table
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
people
use
cars
in the city.
It’s clear that people
use
different types of transport ,
because it depends on your financial position and your own priorities. But in the city Remove the comma
apply
also
works system of reasons why do
Unnecessary verb
apply
people
use
cars
, like: for business , shopping or something like that.
People
use
cars
mostly according pie chart where it placed nearly a little less than half a percent. Second
place is for Light Rail Transit. It gets about Correct article usage
The second
a
nearly more than Correct article usage
apply
one third
. Bronze goes to buses and taxis, they are surprisingly popular with only 10% of Add a hyphen
one-third
people
. If we end up with popularity
of types of transport, Add an article
the popularity
lets
talk about reasons why Replace the word
let's
let us
do
we Unnecessary verb
apply
use
them.
Cars
are used most of all by those who go to work, namely 55% of people
. Silver goes to businessmen because people
use
it for business a little less than 10% for work. Third place goes to children who need to be taken to school, and this
is 40%. The fourth is divided between shopping and activity, but they have a small percentage, namely only 15% for both.Submitted by dnm.best on
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "a little less than" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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