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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, environmental problems
such
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 as greenhouse emission
is
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 noticeable, and
people
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 are now more aware of those
issues
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.
In
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From
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 my perspective, the awareness of
people
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 can be obviously seen by how
people
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 adjust their
life
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lives
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 to be able to help
reducing
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this
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 problem. There are reasons to support the claim.
To begin
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 with, the amount of
plastic
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 bags being used in convenience stores and supermarkets is decreasing as individuals are now using reusable bags
instead
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.
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, the number of
plastic
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 water bottles plummets as citizens are more likely to replace them with reusable water bottles.
Plastic
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 bags and water bottles have the most impact on environmental
issues
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 which has been
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due to
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 the concern of the individuals.
Moreover
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, large companies
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 as McDonald's and Starbucks declared the policies which will have in the reduction of environmental problems.
For example
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, they are now offering paper straws to the customers
instead
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 of
plastic
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 ones.
Furthermore
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,
Starbuck's
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Starbucks's
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 policy is to sell
the
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apply
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reusable cups under their own brand, and consumers who
posses
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possess
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 these cups will have a discount on their drinks.
This
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 psychologically
attract
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 customers to come, but their aim is that they will be able to assist
reducing
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in reducing
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 the consumption of
plastic
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.
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,
people
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 tend to use public
transports
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transport
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 more than private
transports
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transport
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 as they realize that cars are the cause of environmental
issues
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 these days. In summary, individuals are becoming more aware and concerned
of
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about
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 environmental
issues
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.
Thus
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, they are now trying to stop consuming goods which
poses
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pose
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 these
issues
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, and their attempts are noticeable.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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