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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the moey should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Asttronomic
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Astronomic
investiagtions
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investigations
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millions of dollars
anually
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annually
 and many individuals object that those
spendings
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 should be spent on improving Earth's living standards
instead
.
This
authour
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author
 completely
agree
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 with
this
 statement and will demonstrate why throughout
this
 essay. A valid point worth considering is that human lives are more crucial than
further
 investment
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space
 projects.In order to conduct
an
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effective research relating to astronomy, human resources are required as enhancing social facilities and amenities
encourage
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 a
helathier
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healthier
 lifestyle.Without these benefits, spending money on
space
 investigation would likely
to
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be oppose
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 by many
authourities
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authorities
 when human lives are in danger because of the insufficiency in wellbeing.
In addition
,
space
investiagtion
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investigation
 does not
holds
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much
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 benefits as amending living qualities
beause
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because
 focusing
raies
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rates
 on many beneficial
campaign
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 in improving human lifestyles makes the world a more desirable place to live for everybody
while
 spending money on
space
investigaion
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investigation
investigations
 tend to lead to failure as
space
 astronomy is a difficult aspect to research. In conclusion, spending on improving human life qualities is better than those
which
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used for astronomical investigation as enhancing many individuals'
life
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 shall lead to more benefits than researching from outer
space
.

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