Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the moey should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Astronomic
investiagtions
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investigations
have been spent
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millions of dollars
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and many individuals object that those
spendings
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should be spent on improving Earth's living standards
instead
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This
authour
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author
completely
agree
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with
this
statement and will demonstrate why throughout
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essay. A valid point worth considering is that human lives are more crucial than
further
investment
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space
projects.In order to conduct
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effective research relating to astronomy, human resources are required as enhancing social facilities and amenities
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a
helathier
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healthier
lifestyle.Without these benefits, spending money on
space
investigation would likely
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be oppose
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by many
authourities
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authorities
when human lives are in danger because of the insufficiency in wellbeing.
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,
space
investiagtion
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investigation
does not
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much
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benefits as amending living qualities
beause
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because
focusing
raies
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rates
on many beneficial
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in improving human lifestyles makes the world a more desirable place to live for everybody
while
spending money on
space
investigaion
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investigation
investigations
tend to lead to failure as
space
astronomy is a difficult aspect to research. In conclusion, spending on improving human life qualities is better than those
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used for astronomical investigation as enhancing many individuals'
life
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shall lead to more benefits than researching from outer
space
.
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