The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002
The chart
illustrated
the data Wrong verb form
illustrates
of
gold sales in Dubai in 2002. Change preposition
on
Overall
, there was a fluctuating trend in the year.
At the beginning of the year, the number started at 200 millions
dirhams and Change to singular
million
then
increased sharply to 350 million in March. Afterwards, there was a dramatical downtrend and dipped just over 100 million a
bit in July. The data Correct article usage
apply
of
sales was lowest for the next 3 months and decreased Change preposition
for
the
same level compared with July in September. In the Change preposition
at the
last
3 months of the year, the proportion rose up and down nearly 200 million.
To sum up
, sales were highest in March and lowest in July and SeptemberSubmitted by duyuyen18 on
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