The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of

water

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comsumption

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consumption

for three

difference

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purpose

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in North

America

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, South

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Europe

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, Africa, Central

Asia

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and South East

Asia

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, the amount of

water

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used for

agricultural

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sector

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up the largest proportion in South

America

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, Central

Asia

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and South East

Asia

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, in North

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and

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, the vast

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majority of

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is used for

industrial

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sector

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. In South

America

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, Africa, Central

Asia

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and South East

Asia

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water

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usage for agriculture

take

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up 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively. The amount of

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use

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for

this

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sector

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in North

America

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and

Europe

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is only 39% and 32%. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at

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water

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comsumption

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consumption

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This

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sector

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comsumes

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around 48% and 53%

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water

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of water

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use in North

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and

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whereas

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the figures for

remaining

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areas are significantly lower, at only

from

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5% to 12%. Turning to the household, we can see that the percentage of

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used for

this

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sector

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in all zones is

slighly

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slightly

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from 7% to 19%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia, sector with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.

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