The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of

water

comsumption

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consumption

for three

difference

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different

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purpose

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purposes

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in North

America

, South

America

Europe

, Africa, Central

Asia

and South East

Asia

Overall

, the amount of

water

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apply

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used for

agricultural

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the agricultural

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sector

make

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up the largest proportion in South

America

, Central

Asia

and South East

Asia

By contrast

, in North

America

and

Europe

, the vast

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apply

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majority of

water

is used for

industrial

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the industrial

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sector

. In South

America

, Africa, Central

Asia

and South East

Asia

water

usage for agriculture

take

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up 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively. The amount of

water

use

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for

this

sector

in North

America

and

Europe

is only 39% and 32%. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at

water

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the water

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comsumption

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consumption

industrial

sector

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sector

comsumes

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around 48% and 53%

water

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of water

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use in North

America

and

Europe

whereas

the figures for

remaining

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the remaining

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areas are significantly lower, at only

from

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apply

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5% to 12%. Turning to the household, we can see that the percentage of

water

used for

this

sector

in all zones is

slighly

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slightly

small. It just

vary

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from 7% to 19%.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

180 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

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Clear and correct grammar

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The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Governments should ban the violent films and television in order to decrease crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food. What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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Some people believe that there has to be an age limit regarding the users of social media to prevent possible problems they can cause. Do you agree or disagree? Do you think it is logical to design a social media application only for children and teenagers?