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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar illustrates information about the
summarize
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 of
spend
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 money for planning the countries in 5 companies
by
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between
period
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the period
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 2008 to 2011. The values of bar charts in
billion
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dollars
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. In general, the statistical data had more fluctuating data
year
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 by
year
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.
Furthermmore
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Furthermore
, the highest growth
organisation
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 was team 2.
However
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, following from the
historal
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historical
historic
 pattern we can
se
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see
use
 the
decrease
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 amount
year
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 by
year
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 in
organisation
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 5. Regarding
of
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the fluctuating pattern, we can see value
had
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 more than 1
billion
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dollar
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dollars
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 every
year
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such
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apply
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as
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organisation
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 2 had a
started
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 point the approximately 1.25
billion
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dollars
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 by 2008.
Moreover
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, followed by
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organisation
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Organisation
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 3 of the total
spend
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spending
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 money for developing nations was 1.5
billion
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dollars
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in2008
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in 2008
.
Besides
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 that,
the
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organitation
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organisation
organization
 2 always
increase
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increased
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 since 2008,
where
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when
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 the
values
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value
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had
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was
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the
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apply
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approximately 1.25
billion
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 and growth
1.50
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of 1.50
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billion
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dollars
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 to 2011.
In contrast
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,
the
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apply
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organisation
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 3 had more
fluctuative
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fluctuation
 than other
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organisation
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organisations
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 based on the sum of money given for
develop
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developed
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 nations were 1.5, 1.75, 1.25, and 1.5
billion
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dollars
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 from 2008 to 2011. In terms of the
decrease
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values
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values,
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year
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 by
year
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 was
organisation
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 5, where the numbers of total amount had a start value from 1.25 to
decrease
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the
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apply
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approximately 50 per cent every
year
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 until 2011.
On the other hand
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,
the
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apply
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organisation
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 4
also
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 almost
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decrease
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decreased
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year
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 by
year
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. Meanwhile,
the
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apply
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organisation
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 4 could
growth
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 in 2010, where from 2009 had
value
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a value
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0.3
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of 0.3
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 to 0.5 by 2010.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars, year, organisation, decrease with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount of money
  • developing countries
  • organisations
  • from 2008 to 2011
  • given to
  • funding
  • analyze
  • examine
  • discuss
  • evaluate
  • explore
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • trends
  • data
  • chart
  • purpose
  • overview
  • key findings
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