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A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday.write a letter to your friend

#friend #house #pet #holiday
Dear Rachna, I hope you are doing great in your life.As I earlier informed you
that
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, I am going out of
city
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the city
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 to visit my grandparents in India.So, I am going next week for almost two
month
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. I hope you will be able to handle my pet
along with
 some household activities. For my pet,please take him for morning and evening
walk
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walks
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.
Also
,fill the bowls with water and the meal which is inside his room. I request you to stay with him
everytime
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 because
,
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 he
got
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 scared when he is alone as you know he is only six months old.
Apart from
this
, once
in
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a week just take him to a dog saloon near
to
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our home
for
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to
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 dress
upbut
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up
,
you
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 don't need to pay anything as I have
yearly
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a yearly
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 membership.
Moreover
,for my home, just make sure to look inside the fridge as some items have
short
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 life cycle. My cleaning lady came
everyday
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 at 11pm so, just make sure she cleans the house properly. I hope you don't have
much
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 problems doing
these works
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 and I am glad to have you as my friend. Yours faithfully Bhawna soni
Submitted by soni.bhawna232 on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic and avoid unnecessary information outside that topic.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing were appropriate, yet the body of the letter could be better structured into more clear and logically connected paragraphs.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task given, including any bullet points if provided, with relevant detail.
task achievement
Use a range of sentence structures for clarity and to better express ideas, while maintaining a tone suitable for the audience and purpose of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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