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People in your area are having problems with their Internet connections. Write a letter to this company which provides the connection. In your letter 1. describe the problems 2. explain how they are affecting people 3. say what the company should do to help You don't need to write any address

#people #area #internet #connections #company #connection #address
Dear Ahmed , I am
wiriting
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writing
this
 letter to bring your attention
about
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to
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 an
internet
 issue that
happend
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happened
happens
happen
everyday
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every day
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 and
affected
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affects
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 our work and our lives. Undoubtedly,
internet
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the internet
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 plays globally we
are
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apply
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always use
internet
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the internet
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 for work,
study
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and study
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 online there are many reasons to use
internet
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the internet
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whatever
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apply
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, I have been facing
this
 issue
about
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with
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internet
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the internet
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 it is not
connection
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connected
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 well it is poor connection
especially
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 during night time between 10PM
till
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and
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 midnight
also
 in the morning when my children have study online they face poor connection
in addition
, my neighbors have similar problems. I would
be appreciate
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appreciate
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 it if your team would come up with a solution for
this
 issue and solve
urgently
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it urgently
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 hopefully your technical team come
this
 week to
solve
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solve it
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. Best regards, Samir.
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greeting and closing
Ensure a clear structure with an appropriate opening and closing salutation; in this case, it should be more formal, addressing the recipient by their surname and position if known. The current greeting is too informal.
logical structure
Focus on organizing your letter into clear paragraphs; each should address a single point. This would improve the reader's understanding and the organization of your ideas.
complete response
Expand on the complete response by detailing the problems with evidence or examples, explaining the effect on people in depth, and by giving clear suggestions or requests to the company for addressing the issue.
suitable writing tone
Use a consistent formal tone appropriate for the context of a complaint letter to a service provider. Be polite yet assertive in your language choice.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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