The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the outcomes of surveys conducted to figure out the level of satisfaction among visitors throughout two corresponding time periods, and the table compares Ashdown
Museum
visits before and after renovation.
Overall
, the number of guests spending time at the
museum
had a significant increase after the upgrade.
Besides
, there was a notable decline and rise in the proportion of unsatisfied and contented customers.
At
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the beginning, the rate of very satisfied and dissatisfied had a big gap of 30%, leaning towards the unsatisfied part.
As a result
of the refurbishment,
this
figure changed significantly, with 35% and 15%, respectively, and there was an increase of 18,000 in the number of
museum
visitors in comparison to the preceding year. On the final note of comparison, after the development, the customer's
satisfied
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went up steadily from 30% to 40%.
By contrast
, the percentage of guests who were very displeased dropped, which
leveled
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out at 5% from 10%.
Finally
, respondents with no reply remained at 5% before and after the repair of the
museum
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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