The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the outcomes of surveys conducted to figure out the level of satisfaction among visitors throughout two corresponding time periods, and the table compares Ashdown
Museum
visits before and after renovation. Use synonyms
Overall
, the number of guests spending time at the Linking Words
museum
had a significant increase after the upgrade. Use synonyms
Besides
, there was a notable decline and rise in the proportion of unsatisfied and contented customers.
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At
the beginning, the rate of very satisfied and dissatisfied had a big gap of 30%, leaning towards the unsatisfied part. Change the preposition
In
As a result
of the refurbishment, Linking Words
this
figure changed significantly, with 35% and 15%, respectively, and there was an increase of 18,000 in the number of Linking Words
museum
visitors in comparison to the preceding year.
On the final note of comparison, after the development, the customer's Use synonyms
satisfied
went up steadily from 30% to 40%. Replace the word
satisfaction
By contrast
, the percentage of guests who were very displeased dropped, which Linking Words
leveled
out at 5% from 10%. Change the spelling
levelled
Finally
, respondents with no reply remained at 5% before and after the repair of the Linking Words
museum
.Use synonyms
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