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The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works

The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works
The illustration describes the anatomy of a neural
cell
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as well as
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 the respective functions of all of its constituent parts.
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, each
cell
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 or ‘neuron’ comprises two key components: a
cell
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body
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 that issues
information
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 and a sophisticated system of tentacle-like wires that facilitate the delivery of
this
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information
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. The central part of each nerve
cell
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 is the
cell
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body
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, called ‘soma.’ From the soma sprouts many ‘dendrites’ make up the network through which
information
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 from
neighboring
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 cells is transmitted to. The dendrites themselves are made up of minuscule cords called ‘
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axons
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axon
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’, which are responsible for delivering messages from the
cell
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 that they stem from to other parts of the human
body
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, namely to other neurons, muscles or glands. The ‘axons’ are enveloped in a protective cover called the ‘myelin sheath’ (denoted in the diagram as a series of connected transparent capsules) which not only shields the axon but
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 accelerates neural impulses. The
information
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 that the
cell
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body
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 transmits is termed ‘action potential’, which is essentially an electrical signal that travels along the axon to other cells. Cells make contact through a web of ‘terminal buttons’
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 of the axon, and
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 is how neurons are interconnected and
information
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 traverses the human
body
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cell, body, information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 5 times.
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