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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The chart illustrates how many holidaymakers arrived on the
Caribbean
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island
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 between 2010 and 2017.
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, there was an increase in the total
number
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 of visitors to the
Caribbean
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island
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, which was the result of growth in the
number
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 of tourists staying on cruise ships and staying on
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island
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the island
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ones
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apply
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.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of holidaymakers choosing cruise
ship
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ships
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 saw a development, becoming the choice of most
people
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 visiting
Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 from 2016 onwards. Just 1
million
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 total visitors visited
this
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island
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 in 2010, with a significant rise to 3,5
million
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 visitors
at the end
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 of the period. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of tourists staying on cruise ships increased steadily from about 0,3
million
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people
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 to exactly 2
million
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people
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 in 2017. The
number
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 of
people
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 visiting
Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 and staying there hovered around 0,3
million
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people
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 in 1 first year, before fluctuating and ending at 1,5
million
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people
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words caribbean, island, number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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