The diagram shows the process of water treatment

The diagram shows the process of water treatment
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The diagram illustrates how the
water
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is prepared for drinking and household usage.
Overall
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, the
water
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treatment has 10 stages. Starting from intake of
water
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then
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it goes to different processing like settling in the basin, adding chlorine and disinfecting and
finally
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to the faucet.
To begin
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with,
water
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is collected from a natural resource.
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it passes to a pump and undergoes a machine process. Afterwards, the
water
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goes through a mixing method called flash mix from there, the oxidants and polyaluminum chloride mix into the
water
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.
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the flocculation procedure takes place followed by
water
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settling in a basin to collect the impurities down to the basin.
Subsequently
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, the
water
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enters a big box which has chlorine in it and
then
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, it flows through a pipe for filter procedure in a filter membrane.
After
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this
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step, the
water
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then
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comes to another container called disinfection, there the disinfecting procedure takes place with other products namely, lime, chlorine and fluoride. In the next stage, the
water
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passes to another pump and
finally
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, it is ready in the faucet for people to use it.
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