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The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits during the same two periods.

The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits during the same two periods.
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The table illustrates the rate of
visitors
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 that visited during the year before and the year after Ashdown
Museum
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 was refurbished,
while
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 the pie charts present the satisfaction of
visitors
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 when they visited the
museum
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 at two different times.
Overall
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, the number of
visitors
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 rose after the
museum
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 was refurbished. Before refurbishing, most of the
visitors
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 were not satisfied with the
museum
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, but they changed their moods to satisfied after the refurbishment. Regarding the table, the rate of tourists was 74,000 people before the
museum
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 was refurbished,
then
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 increased to 92,000 tourists

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor satisfaction
  • surveys
  • statistical measures
  • quantify
  • implications
  • facilities
  • evaluate
  • attraction
  • strategies
  • exhibits
  • publicity
  • renovation
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