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The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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This
 diagram shows how
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the use
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use
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using
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sun
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of sun
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 energy
produed
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produces
electricity
into
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for
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home
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the home
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. It is
cler
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clear
 from the graph that
have
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it has
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 5 parts: solar panels, inverter, electrical panel,
utility
 meter and
utility
 grid.
According to
 what is shown,
initially
, we put solar
panel
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panels
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in
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on
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house
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the house
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 roof.
Then
, the sunlight absorbs and
change
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changes
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 it into DC current.
Next,
the DC
curren
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current
go
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goes
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 to
inverter
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an inverter
the inverter
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that
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apply
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located in the well to
converts
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convert
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 DC current into AC current
also
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and also
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 to
controls
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control
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 the
electricity
 and production.
Then
, the electrical panel
tke
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takes
 the AC current and
distibates
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distributes
dissipates
 the
electricity
 to our home.
Moreover
, any excess solar
electricity
 will flow
bake
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back
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 to the
guid
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guide
though
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through
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 the
utility
 meter.
While
 the
utility
 grid was
provide
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provided
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this
 excess
electricit
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electricity
.
Finally
, the home is ready to use
electricity
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, utility with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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