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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph below displays the results obtained
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 a questionnaire about the habits of drinking
coffee
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 and tea in some Australian
cities
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.
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, the largest tendency in all five
cities
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were
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 buying
coffee
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 and tea in a café,
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 fewer
people
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 bought fresh
coffe
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coffee
. The number of
people
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 buying instant
coffee
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 is similar in all
cities
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. Melbourne has the largest amount of
people
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 going to a café for a
coffee
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 or tea in the
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 4 weeks, with a percentage of approximately 64%, followed by
Hobarty
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Hobart
 with 62.5% and
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 Sydney with 61%. Just over 55% of
people
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 went to a café in Brisbane and just under 50% in Adelaide. The number of
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 in Sydney and Melbourne
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 between 40% and 45%, and in Hobarts there were approximately 38% of
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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. Both Brisbane and Adelaide had just under 35% of
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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.
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, almost 55% of
people
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 in Hobart bought instant
coffee
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 and 52,5% in Brisbane,
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 other three
cities
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 the percentage of
people
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 consuming instant
coffee
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were
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 between 45 and 50%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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