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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Multinational organizations are growing day by day in developing
countries
.
This
 essay will suggest that increasing multinational corporations has great advantages like creating employment in the locality and
overall
 economic growth of the country
while
 the disadvantages are environmental
pollution
 and dominant
government
 when making policies. The main
advantages
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 of
this
 phenomenon is
craeting
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creating
 employment opportunities in society. Most developing country has
high
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 rate of unemployment.
For
this
 reason, the crime rates are high,
security
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and security
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 and armed forces fall
trouble
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into trouble
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. So, multinational companies help to keep peace in
the
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apply
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society by creating many job opportunities.
Moreover
, by paying
tax
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taxes
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, a
company
 contributes to a
countriies
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country's
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ovelall
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overall
economical
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economic
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 growth. Most
of
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the
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apply
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multinational
corporation
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corporations
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paid two third
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pay two-thirds
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 of a
contries
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countries
country's
 GDP.
fOR
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FOR
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 INSTANCE,
iN
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IN
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 BANGLADESH ,
mobile
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a mobile
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company
 ,
cigarate
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cigarette
company
 paid 45% TAX AND THE
OVERALL
 AMOUNT WAS 5% of
total
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the total
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 GDP. Despite these
advantages
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advantages,
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 there are a few disadvantages too.
Firstly
, multinational companies are responsible for environmental
pollution
. They intended to use toxic material and
do
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did
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 not maintain
code
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the code
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 of sewerage.
Thats
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 why,
the
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environment
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environmental
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pollution
are
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is
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in severe condition in developing
countries
.
For example
, Delhi the capital city of India is
number
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the number
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 1 polluted city in the world,
due to
 over
development
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overdevelopment
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 of many multinationals.
Secondly
, many companies help to dominate the
government
 .So, the
government
 make policy in
favor
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favour
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 of them.
For example
,
Modi
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the Modi
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 brothers influenced
south
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South
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 African
authority
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authorities
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 to make
tax
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a
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 free business policy. Despite
this
 policy is deleterious for
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the south
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south
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 African
government
. In conclusion,
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a Multinational
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Multinational
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a Multinational
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company
 is
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a must
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must
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a must
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 for developing
countries
 because
it
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they
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helps
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help
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 a
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country's
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countries
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country's
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overall
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economic
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economical
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economic
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development and
reduce
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reduces
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 unemployment.
On the contrary
, for
pollution
 and making ineffective
policies
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policies,
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 these
company
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companies
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 are responsible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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