IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#changes #production #millions #three #products #garment #factory #information #features #comparisons
the graph provides information containing the changes in how much clothing
Add a missing verb
was exports
show examples
exports
Replace the word
exported
show examples
 in three countries
during
Change preposition
from
show examples
 1999 to 2003. generally speaking, the movement of clothes
sales
 in each country shows different
movement
Fix the agreement mistake
movements
show examples
. In
Colombia
Add a comma
Colombia,
show examples
 the clothes trading increased when in Japan it's
slighly
Correct your spelling
slightly
 decreasing and in Myanmar shows
a fluctuating trends
Correct the article-noun agreement
a fluctuating trend
fluctuating trends
show examples
.
In
Change the preposition
At
show examples
 the beginning of
period
Add an article
the period
show examples
, there
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
 no production
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
 clothes in Myanmar, but
then
 it
rocket
Wrong verb form
rocketed
show examples
 to 800
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
dollars
 in one year and
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 peak just above 900
millons
Correct your spelling
million
 of
dollars
 a year later, but unfortunately it suddenly dropped nearly to 350
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
dollars
 in the next one year. after that, the
sales
 in Myanmar
Wrong verb form
began
show examples
begin
Add the particle
begin to
show examples
 rise
continously
Correct your spelling
continuously
 until the end of
period
Add an article
the period
show examples
, but not as
signifact
Correct your spelling
significantly
 as
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the start. That's clear from the data that
sales
 in Colombia
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 already high in 1999, nearly 450
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
dollars
. and it
continues
Wrong verb form
continued
show examples
 rose to 700
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
dollars
 in 3 years, but
then
 it
suddently
Correct your spelling
suddenly
drop
Change the verb form
drops
show examples
 to 600
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
dollars
 in 2003.
Besides
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Japan's
sales
also
shows
Change the verb form
show
show examples
a
Change the article
the
show examples
 highest amount of
dollars
in
Change the preposition
at
show examples
 the beginning of
period
Correct article usage
the period
show examples
Correct your spelling
amongst
among
amongs
Correct your spelling
among
 other countries,much above 500
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
dollars
, but
it
Correct your spelling
at
show examples
 the end of
period
Add an article
the period
show examples
 it drop just
bellow
Correct your spelling
below
show examples
 500
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
dollars
Submitted by haloalwan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, period, millions, dollars with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: