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the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040

the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The graph illustrates the growth in the percentage of the urban population in
four
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 Asian countries (the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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) from 1970 to 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Additionally
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, the graph shows that the
Philippines
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 and
Malaysia
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 began with a higher percentage of people in cities in 1970 compared to those in
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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.
Overall
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, the percentage of people in towns grew the most between 1970 and 2020 in
Malaysia
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 as compared to that in
Thailand
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, which saw the least proportion of growth.
On the other hand
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, the urban populations in the
Philippines
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 and
Indonesia
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 did not grow as much as in
Malaysia
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.
Additionally
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, in the years 2030 and 2040, all
four
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 nations will see a rise in their urban populations All
four
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 countries are expected to grow with the same trend that they experienced until 2020. In terms of city dwellers in
Malaysia
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, they grew by around 58% to reach 78% in 2020, in comparison to 50%, 45% and 30% in
Indonesia
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, the
Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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 respectively. The projected population rise for the years 2030 and 2040 , for
Indonesia
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 is around 55% to 58%. For
Thailand
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, the gain is 33% to 44 % . But for the
Philippines
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, there is only a marginal increase which is 48 % to 50 %. For
Malaysia
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, the gain is 72 % to 85 %. So, the increase in population is found in all
four
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 countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words four, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • rural-urban migration
  • economic development
  • industrialization
  • infrastructure strain
  • environmental impacts
  • social challenges
  • urban planning
  • government policies
  • housing policies
  • public services
  • trend analysis
  • prediction
  • initiatives
  • urban growth management
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