The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graphs provide data on the
number
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of closed and the new-opened stores over a period of 7 years.
Overall
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, at the beginning of the period, the
number
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of shop closures had the highest level,
while
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the lowest
number
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of
that
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them
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happened
atthe
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at the
end of the period.
By contrast
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, in 2013 and 2015 the largest and lowest
number
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of shop closures
experienced
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were experienced
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.
According to
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the diagram,
decpite
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despite
all fluctuations, the
number
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of
openning
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opening
stores had a significant decrease from 2011 to 2018. In 2011, the
number
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of
open-stores
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open stores
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were
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was
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about 8500 and in 2012 it declined to below 4000
shops
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.
Then
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from 2012 until
2014
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2014,
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there was a growth in the
number
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of open
shops
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, but in the following years from 2014 to 2018 the related diagram
fall
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fell
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gradually and reached 3000 opening
store
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stores
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. The figure related to the shop closures
also
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experienced a slight decline
compare
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compared
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to the first year. The
number
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of closing
shops
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were
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was
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about 6300 in the first year and had a dramatic decrease until 2015,
then
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the downward trend broke and
grown
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grew
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remarkably until 2018 and reached around 5100 closing
shops
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Fluctuation
  • Shop closures
  • Retail openings
  • Economic conditions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Local economy
  • Business dynamics
  • Commercial landscape
  • Statistical comparison
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Consumer trends
  • Market forces
  • Business cycle
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