The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the
center
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of a small
neighborhood
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named Islip in the present time and how it is going to be in the future. At
the
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first glance, it is clearly seen that so many new buildings are going to be constructed
instead
of shops near the
country side
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countryside
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such
as car
park
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parks
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, shopping
center
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centers
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, bus
station
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stations
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and dual
carriageway
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carriageways
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. As is observed, the number of houses
are
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going to expand soon.
Besides
, the road street seems to get a
total
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new path based on
modernization
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a modernization
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plan. There will be
also
a special path just for pedestrians. The interesting point is that not only will the number of housing increase near the
park
, but
also
there will be
a
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new housing near the car
park
.
Moreover
, as is observed, there is no connection
among
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the
existed
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school, the houses next to it and the
park
, but it seems there will be a new road among them based on
expansion
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an expansion
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plan.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • town centre
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrian
  • amenities
  • refurbishment
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • conservation
  • modernization
  • facilities
  • expansion
  • renovation
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