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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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the two diagrams give us information about an
island
Use synonyms
 , before and after
Correct article usage
the addtion
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addtion
Correct your spelling
addition
adding
Change preposition
of
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some facilities .
overall
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,it can be seen that the noticeable changes
is
Change the verb form
are
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 in the replacement of housing ,
also
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 the infrastructure of the city
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 been developed. regards to the main change
Linking Words
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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is in the accommodation,
befor
Correct your spelling
the
island
Use synonyms
 is lack of houses ,
however
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 after construction , they full of villas for holiday-makers , there are a lot of houses that
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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are located in the middle of
Use synonyms
island
Add an article
the island
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 on both
side
Change to a plural noun
sides
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moreover
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, all houses are connecting by foot path. refers to other facilities namely ,
Add an article
a
the
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restaurant
where
Correct word choice
which
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 is located on the top of the map ,
as well as
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 they have got reception
that is
Linking Words
 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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in front of the restaurant ,
in addition
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, when travelers are arriving to
Use synonyms
island
Add an article
the island
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 they
shoud
Correct your spelling
should
 use
vehicle
Correct article usage
a vehicle
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 track to get reception and restaurant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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