ome people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others belive that some imformation is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people opine that it is crucial to share each and every
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knowledge
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piece of knowledge
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related to science, business
as well as
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academic
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publically
whereas
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, others are
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against
of
this
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statement.
This
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essay will discuss both the views
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my
opininon
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opinion
. I believe that
this
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has more negatives as compare with
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benefits
.
To begin
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with,
knowledge
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plays a vital role in everybody's life no matter
it
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if it
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is related to studies, research or studies. All individuals have
right
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the right
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to know about what is happening around the world so, that they can make themselves up-to-date and if anyone
ask
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them what is happening in their
country
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, they can answer confidently.
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, when COVID-19 was influencing the whole world, every
country
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was doing research related to medicines, vaccines and other majors that can be
takrn
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taken
to prevent their citizens and all of them
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telecasted on social media, televisions
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also
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on radio. so, that their folks know what measures the authorities are
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to prevent them from
this
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disease On the flip side, there are many
information
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of information
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that a
country
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can not share with their citizens as some are too valuable and some are under research.
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,
government
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the government
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can not share some scientific
reasearch
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research
related to their
country
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's safety as
some time
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sometimes
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they are researching
on
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apply
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bombs and guns for their own safety.
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, some people are researching some apps for studies and related to business and till the time they can not make any solution it
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will
be harmful to
reveaal
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reveal
in public as it will cause some problems. To
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conclude
,
knowledge
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is important but, it depends
what
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on what
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kind of
knowledge
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should be shared
publicaly
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publicly
publically
and some should be prevented
from
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by
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folks. As some
informations
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information
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are
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is
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that important if
anybody's
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get
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gets
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to know about that, their life will be in danger.
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task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and extended with specific details and examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay into clear paragraphs with distinct ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas and make logical transitions.
language
Pay attention to the accuracy of your grammar and vocabulary. Use a variety of complex structures and check your work for errors before finalizing.
task achievement
Your conclusion should clearly summarize the main points of your essay and reflect your opinion. Make sure it ties back to the question prompt effectively.
language
There are several spelling mistakes (e.g., 'benifits', 'opinon', 'publicaly', 'reasearch', 'majors'). Remember that accurate spelling is crucial in the IELTS exam.
language
You should avoid overly casual language and expressions that may not be appropriate for an academic essay.
task achievement
Make sure to balance both parts of the discussion equally and provide a clear personal opinion.
language
Be aware of repetitive sentence structures and aim to vary your sentence complexity to demonstrate language flexibility.
coherence cohesion
To improve readability, avoid run-on sentences and check that each sentence expresses a complete and clear idea.
task achievement
Be thorough with your introduction by clearly establishing the topic and your view on it, to provide the reader with a clear understanding of what to expect in your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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