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The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.

The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.
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The bar charts
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 the number of
students
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 who speak foreign languages in five different countries.
Overall
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, we can see
Indian
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that Indian
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students
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 are more proficient in foreign languages
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than
that
 others, followed by Romania and Vietnam.
In contrast
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,
chinese
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pupils
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 are more difficult to learn new idioms.
It is clear that
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students
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 from India have higher
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skills
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 in speaking another language than their mother tongue, with an average of 68% females and 55% males. The second most proficient are
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 from Romania, with an average of almost 50%; followed by Vietnam and Russia, with nearly 45% and 40% of the
students
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.
On the other hand
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,
chinese
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students
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 are not very accomplished with other languages, having the lowest percentage in comparison to
other
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the other
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 four, with 30% of female
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 and 18% of male
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. A point to highlight is
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Thai
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 juniors we can see the figure of male
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are
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 higher than women, with approximately
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a 5
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%
of
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difference.

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