Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some say that
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is very successful at making
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purchase products,
while
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others argue that advertising is so normal that individuals do not pay attention.
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essay would argue that
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companies know what
people
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want, there
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too
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publicity
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, which makes
people
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exhausted and annoyed. On the one hand, companies know what consumers are looking for.
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is because before making any advertisement, they will
make
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conduct
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different
analysis
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analyses
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and
researchs
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to ensure that what they offer is what
pepole
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people
want, in
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point, the cooperation had almost
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.
Then
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, the only thing that they need to do, is make a creative and original announcement to catch
people
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's eyes.
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, nowadays many
company's
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companies'
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advertising
look
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looks
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like a short movie and
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is
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more interesting than it was before, as they might show something that has nothing to do with what they sell, but
people
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are able to relate
them
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to them
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.
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, I believe that
people
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normally do not even watch an entire
advertising
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advertisement
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.
On the other hand
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, there are too many advertisements in these days.
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are able to watch
publicity
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in
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social
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media
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, applications, websites and in the street.
People
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might see
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hundreds of
advertising
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advertisements
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everyday
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, and they get tired and angry
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them.
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is because advertising normally blocks or stops what
people
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were
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doing, and they need to wait for the
publicity
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to end so they can continue. No one will feel good when they are stopped
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in
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the middle of an activity or a video.
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, normally there are around two advertisements at the beginning of each video
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YouTube, and there might be more in the middle of the video.
People
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do not stay watching the
publicity
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,
instead
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, they will take advantage and use
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time for something else. In my opinion, there is
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amount of
publicity
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, so
people
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get used to
watch
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watching
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it and do not pay attention to
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it
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. In conclusion,
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companies nowadays know what
people
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are looking for, individuals can watch
publicity
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in every place, which makes them feel angry and tired, and,
that is
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why I believe that
people
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nowadays do not pay attention to them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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