Describe a place where you like to travel and give out reasons

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extrovert and addicted to
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new things . the most reason is
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want to expand my individual perspective to improve my knowledge.
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quite like food so
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able to try
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would like to go with my Friends for the reason that
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companionship to help each
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that we can share our experiences to save ourselves
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Introduction & Conclusion
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential components of a well-structured response. Aim to clearly state your main topic in the introduction and summarise your main points in the conclusion.
Idea Development
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Pronoun Usage
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Grammar & Accuracy
The essay contains multiple grammatical errors and awkward phrases that impede understanding. Proofread your work and consult resources to improve your grammatical range and accuracy.
Coherence & Logic
The overall structure of the essay is not very clear, and the points are not well-connected. Use linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs, enhancing the logical flow of information.
Task Fulfillment
Your task response is weak as the essay does not thoroughly or appropriately address all parts of the task. Ensure that you cover all aspects of the prompt and provide a more complete discussion of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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