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Your friend wants to send her/his children to your house for the weekend. write a letter to him/her and say Agree to this arrangement say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do

#friend #children #house #weekend #arrangement #time
Dear Zahra, I hope my
letter
 finds you well I am writing
this
letter
 to confirm you I am able to take care of your children
this
 weekend for 2 days . I received your
letter
last
 week and today I
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Verb problem
received
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 your
letter
due to
 I need to organize my
schedules
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schedule
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. I would like to know about
you
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your
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 children what
likes
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their likes
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 and dislikes
, what
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are, what
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 time they go to bed and
weak
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wake
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 up in the morning
finally
 what they want to eat.
Accordingly
 your
letter
 you
was
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were
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 not able to
dropped
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drop
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 and pick
up
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it up
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them
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apply
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so do not worry I will be considering
and
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apply
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arrangements . I am
pleaning
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planning
pleading
planing
 to watch a movie at
AMC
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the AMC
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 cinema near my house
then
 we are going to
park
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the park
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 I’ll make a chocolate cake , the next day we are going to
beach
Correct article usage
the beach
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also
 near my home there is
library
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a library
the library
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 I want to take them to study and read a book. Do not hesitate to ask anything I am pretty sure you will enjoy
this
 weekend I will give them
a memorable weekends
Correct the article-noun agreement
a memorable weekend
memorable weekends
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. I am waiting for your
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reply
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. Regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear and logical structure, with each paragraph presenting a distinct idea. Use linking words appropriately to ensure the cohesion of the text.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, using clear and well-developed points relevant to the topic.
task achievement
While you have agreed to the arrangement and mentioned the activities, you need to specify a suitable time for your friend to bring her children over, as requested in the task prompt.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter, fitting a semi-formal context. Avoid informal language and ensure you use polite requests and offers.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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