The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in

1989.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below illustrates information on the average residential building pricing in five
cities
on
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the span between 1990 and 2002 compared to the pricing in 1989.
Overall
, it can be seen that the deviation of the two different periods of time in comparison to
the
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1989 showed a different pattern. The
period
of
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1990 to 1995 showed a negative trend of deviation in the majority of the
cities
,
while
the 1996 to 2002 showed the opposite, where the
period
experienced a positive trend in almost all of the
cities
. For the case of the 1990 to 1995
period
, the pricing
level
are
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generally lower in comparison to how it was in 1989 for New York, Tokyo, and London with an average decline rate of around 5-7%.
Although
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a different result was experienced for Madrid and Frankfurt housing
price
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prices
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, which showed a slight rise of approximately 2% in comparison to
1989
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the 1989
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pricing
level
.
On the other hand
, the 1996 to 2002
period
experienced a surge
of
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housing
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the housing
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price
level
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levels
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from
the
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1989 in almost all of the
cities
except Tokyo which is still lower
on
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a -5% rate. The most apparent and noticeable surge
of
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price is
showed
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shown
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by London with a massive rate of 12% increase. Other
cities
which are New York and Madrid
also
experienced a less drastic surge on the
level
of around 5% increase.
Lastly
, house pricing located in Frankfurt mainly stayed the same with only a deviation of approximately 1%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, period, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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