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Today many people do not know their neighbours. What are the reasons and solutions for this issues.

#people #neighbours
Nowadays, a large
individuals
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 don't have
understanding
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an understanding
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about
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people
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the people
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 living around their residence.
This
 essay discusses the reasons for the above and will
also
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solution
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a solution
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 for
this
 matter. Many civilians do not have much knowledge about their
neighbours
 because they do not have time to interact with
neighbours
due to
 their tiring work schedule which
leave
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 them
a
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little time.
For example
, a person working 14 hours a day would prioritize spending time with family;
thus
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 him
an inadequate opportunities
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 to know the neighbourhood.
Moreover
,
people
 like to maintain privacy because of safety concerns. To illustrate, the
neighbours
 in my city don't talk much with the others in their community because of vast
media
 stories where many victims'
neighbours
 were responsible for their murder or other heinous crimes.
This
 sometimes creates fear in the minds of
people
 to open up with
neighbours
.
However
, in order to understand the locals better, the community programmes and
media
 could contribute significantly to forge a better bond
within
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among
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 the
people
 living in a neighbourhood. In my region, the residents not only celebrate famous festivals together, by gathering at a
common place
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,
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 but
also
exhange
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exchange
 gifts and greetings.
This
 should be adopted in other societies because it offers a good platform to know about someone.
This
 public setting
also
provide
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 a secure environment in light of
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the imcreasing
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imcreasing
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increasing
 crime rate for those who take extreme precautions and avoid talking
their
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neighbours
.
In addition
 to
this
 , it is
a
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 responsibility of our
media
 to demonstrate the positive sides of
neighbours
 as well; not merely,
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 exaggeration of neighbourhood crimes. In conclusion, I believe that the development of not knowing one's neighbour is because of
busy
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a busy
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 schedule and an increasing sense of insecurity.
However
, encouraging public events aimed at gathering
local
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the local
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 community and
proactive
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the proactive
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 role of
media
 to inculcate security among the general populace could solve
this
 limitation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • neighbourhood bonds
  • social media connectivity
  • urban lifestyle
  • online relationships
  • fast-paced society
  • privacy concerns
  • communal relations
  • individualism
  • transient societies
  • expatriates
  • cultural shift
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