You have recently come back from an overseas holiday. You face some problems with the hotel booked through your travel agent. Write a letter to your travel agent. In your letter • Details about hotel booking • Problems that you faced there • Gives the distance to the travel agent so that such problems are not repeated

Dear Mr. Palitha, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am
writting
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writing
this
letter to you to inform
about
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the problems I faced in Royal Tulip
Hotel
while
I was
travelled
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in India for
7-days
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7 days
along with
my family members. As far as I am concerned, your company has been providing excellent services related to travelling
in
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overseas. Based on
this
information, I had communicated with your agency with a view to booking
hotel
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a hotel
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near
at
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Agra Tajmahal in India.
According to
our
requirement
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requirements
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, you have booked
the
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one double-bed room in
Royal
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the Royal
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Tulip
Hotel
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Agra for the whole trip. But it is a matter of sorrow that we had faced several issues in
this
hotel
such
as poor room services, and
unheigenic
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unhygienic
food etc.
In addition
to that the most important
problems
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we
had
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faced
in
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there
is about
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the
hotel
distance which is very far away from the Agra Tajmahal. It took almost one and
half
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a half
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hour
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to reach the Tajmahal from the
hotel
. Considering the above-mentioned information, we
will be
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anticipating
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that
this
type of
issues
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issue
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must be considered in future
while
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when
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any tourist is interested
to get
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in getting
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any services from your esteemed travel agency, especially
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regarding
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hotel
distance from
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destination. Yours faithfully, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clearer understanding. Avoid blending different complaints or topics within the same paragraph.
task achievement
Your task response could be improved by offering more detailed descriptions of the problems faced and possibly suggestions for compensation or corrective actions you would like the agency to consider.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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