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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of tourists who travelled to a special Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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, the total number of
visitors
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is
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inreased
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increased
 from 2010 to 2017.
The
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 period between 2010 and 2012 the rapid increase can be seen.
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 it was
icreasedgradually
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increased gradually
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upto
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up to
 2015.
Dreastic
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Drastic
 climbing can be
obcerved
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observed
 in
2016
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the 2016
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 and 2017 period.
To begin
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,
visitors
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 who
stayied
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stayed
 on
island
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the island
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remain
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remained
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same
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the same
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untill
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until
 2011. After, a significant
increasement
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increase
 was taken place
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upto
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up to
 2013. It was 2 million
of
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apply
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visitors
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.
Then
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 amount of
visitors
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count
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is
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 steady
as
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for up
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upto
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to
 2 years.
THowever
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However
, there was a drop had been
occured
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occurred
 in 2016.
Ultimatelt
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Ultimately
, a number of
touriest
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tourist
tourists
 began to climb up.
Further
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,
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visitors
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for visitors
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 who
stayied
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stayed
 in cruise
shuips
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ships
, there is
a
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apply
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gradual
grown
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 can be observed. by 0.5 million.
Eventhough
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Even though
,
drop
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the drop
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 had
occured
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occurred
 in 2015
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upto
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up to
initnal
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the initnal
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 level, a significant escalation
acquised
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acquired
accused
whithin
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within
next
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the next
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 5 years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, upto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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