research into new types of medicine and treatments are essential for improving health and deal with diseases. Who do you think should fund this research: private companies, individuals or governments?

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is needed to discover new medicines or therapies for a disease. For

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are required, which can only be done by a government.

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or a private player. Meanwhile, a government has a vast capacity to execute a complex and laborious project. Private entities will always be concerned about profit, and try to get back what they have spent on the

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, mostly from the

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consumers.

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, governments can work

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a profit in their mind and provide medicines they have developed at a rebated price. It is well known that private industries often flaunt ethical rules and regulations. The chances of a government entity doing so much less.

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can trust governments to do good for them. In conclusion, it is better to entrust governments with the task of creating new treatments and medicine as they are not profit oriented,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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research into new types of medicine and treatments are essential for improving health and deal with diseases. Who do you think should fund this research: private companies, individuals or governments?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that movies should only be for entertainment. Others think they should also have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and give your opinion.