In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this a positive or negative thing?

At present, suburb dwellers in some nations around the world, are relocating to towns looking for
searching
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jobs and better lives,
however
, the rural society
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with fewer people.Personally, I believe that others are benefiting from working and
also
enjoying their lives in urban areas. First of all, humans who
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in villages
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challenge of
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of
works
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in their community area,
therefore
,
this
demands them to move to town in search of greener pastures and money.Moreso, they are working to get capital to support their families through paying them
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tuition
, bills and
also
buying food.An example to illustrate that could be my native country,
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population is now dwelling in cities
due to
plenty of piecework and they receiving good salaries.
Furthermore
, sometimes in urban areas, people
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prefer to walk to the CBD
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some activities and in comparison,
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those who travel from
countryside
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need transport to and from their places.
Hence
,
it is clear that
urban
family
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can
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transportation costs and use it for other purposes.
Moreover
, life in urban areas it's fast, easy and better as compared to village
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.Human beings in towns are easily accessible to many important things
such
as banks and government offices and it can be exemplified
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those in my home city, it's rare to find a bank in
rurals
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rural
but in Central Business District, there
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lots of them which means all those who stay in cities can get their pensions and withdraw their money as soon as they can.
This
also
can
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the positive achievements of
such
families being in urban centres, since they are close to
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of things.
To conclude
, I definitely believe that living in town can be an added advantage to
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society,
hence
it will be easier to make money and get access to everything.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic opportunities
  • career prospects
  • quality of life
  • cultural exchange
  • economic stagnation
  • urban overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • natural habitats
  • migration
  • superior education and healthcare services
  • diverse and vibrant cultural landscape
  • local services
  • urban slums
  • pressure on infrastructure
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