Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Although
some
people
think that we should not
change
things which affect our
lives
badly
such
as working in
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job that we don’t like or
shortage
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a shortage
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of money, others believe that we should
change
and improve these
conditions
.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument and explain why we should
change
situations
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that
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we do not want to live. On the
one
hand, some
people
have
general
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belief about to live with
the
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harsh
conditions
will bring success and help to maintain achievements. If
people
live and manage hard
conditions
, they can easily organise their
lives
when become
a
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wealthy person.
Furthermore
, they can help
people
who
lives
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in
the
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bad situations when they
will
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become
a
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rich because they already know the feeling of being poor.
In addition
to that, living in
the
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unwanted
conditions
may trigger different side of the personality
such
as being more disciplined and hardworking
that
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which
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also
bring success.
On the other hand
, others think that we should take risks and improve our
life
’s
conditions
immediately,
otherwise
we can stuck in the same
life
until die.
Also
, coping with the
stressfull
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stressful
environment for a long time may bring
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illnesses
such
as anxiety and cancer.
Furthermore
, we are only the
person
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people
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that
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who
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have
an
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ability to bring
change
to our
life
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lives
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and no
one
else will do something for us.
Moreover
, they believe that we do not need to face harsh
conditions
to understand other’s
lives
and
being
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a good person enough reason for help to others. In conclusion, both sides of the argument have their own merit. In my opinion, we should improve our
life
from
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every
aspects
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. If we are working in
the
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job that we do not like, we should not spend even more than
one
day and seek for the better
one
because we have a limited time in
the
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apply
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life
and we will not come to the earth to live again. That’s why we should always do things that feel great.
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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