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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015
The bar chart illustrates the earnings of exports in one country in different categories during the two years of 2015 and 2016. The table presents the proportion
in
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 each label of exports in 2016 compared with the same categories in 2015.
Overall
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, both Petroleum products and engineered goods
are
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have
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 the
top
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highest earnings.
Furthermore
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,
texitiles
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textiles
 showed a significant change in
value
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.
Additionally
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, gems and jewellery are the only category that declined in
its
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apply
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value
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.
To begin
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 with, engineered goods
considered
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were considered
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 the highest in earnings in 2015 with over
than
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apply
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60
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billions
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billion
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 and the
value
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raised
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 to be approximately 63
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billions
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billion
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 in 2016.
Moreover
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, in 2015 Petroleum products
value
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 was over 55
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billions
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billion
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 and jumped to
be
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more than 60
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billions
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billion
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 in 2016. The considerable
raise
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rise
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 in
value
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 was in textiles with 15.24%.
However
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, gems and jewellery decreased
with
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by
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 5.18% to be the only category that reduced in
value
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, billions with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, categories, value, goods, services
  • Trends, increase, decrease, percentage, compared
  • Significant, minimal, fluctuation, remained stable
  • Domestic product, international trade, economic indicators
  • Manufacturing, agriculture, technology, textiles
  • Revenue, economic growth, trade deficit
  • Forecast, predict, anticipate, implications
  • Global market, exchange rate, competitiveness
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