The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie charts compare the percentage of
population
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devided
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divided
into three
age
categories in 2000 and with expectations for 2050.
Overall
, what stands out from the charts is that
Yemen
had more
young
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population in 2000 and the same is predicted for 2050. The populations of
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both given countries are forecasted to get older over the
50 year
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period. Looking at the year
of
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2000, just over half population of
Yemen
were 14 years old and under compared to just over 14% of Italians in the same
age
group. The category of 15-59 years was the most popular in Italy at around 61%,
while
this
figure in
Yemen
showed 46.3%. Yemeni citizens who are 60+ were marginal, at 3.6%
whereas
this
age
rate in Italy experienced 8.7% more than
Yemen
. Turning to the year
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2050, it is predicted that
middle aged
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people (15-59) and citizens who are 60 and older will increase in number, at around 57.3% and 5.7%, respectively.
While
the same
age
groups in Italy are forecasted to experience the opposition. To be more precise, the number of those who are between 15 to 59 years old is expected to drop from a bit more than 61% to 46% and those who are under 14, from just over 14% to 11%, in turn.
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the group
age
(60+) is projected to grow significantly in 2050.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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