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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many nations have taken steps to ban smoking in
resturants
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restaurants
, hospitals, and parks.
This
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 essay agrees with that statement
becasue
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because
 smoking can cause health issues
to
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 non-
smokers
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, and it can
also
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 influence other people
especially
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, especially
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 teenagers. The primary reason why smoking should be illegal in public places is that
smokes
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smoke
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 from
cigrettes
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cigarettes
 can affect
individuals
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that
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who
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 do not smoke.
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, in India, many cases are reported in the hospital that are related to
the
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lungs
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 issues mainly
due to
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 the inhalation of
smokes
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. Another issue relating to smoking
in
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outdoor
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 is that, it can have a huge influence on youngsters. Young
iindividuals
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individuals
 watch
smokers
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 and they
get
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 a tendency to smoke as well, which can damage their health from
young
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a young
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 age.
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, in India, there are
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many teenagers who started smoking at the age of 14-15
due to
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 the impact of adult
smokers
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Subsequently
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 these young
individuals
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 have
higher
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a higher
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 chance
for
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of
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 cancer
realted
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related
peoblem
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problems
 in future.
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,
individuals
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 who smoke in public leave behind ashes and
rest
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 of the
cigrettes
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cigarettes
 in
place
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a place
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 where they are smoking, which will litter that area.
Smokers
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 are not aware of how much waste they are leaving behind.
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Moreover
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 they are not aware of the impact they are causing to the environment.
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, in America,
smokers
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 throw away large
amount
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amounts
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 of
cigrette
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cigarette
cigarettes
 particles after smoking.
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, littering the place. In conclusion, smoking should be illegal in outdoor areas
becasue
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because
 it can affect other
individuals
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 and it can have a huge impact
of
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on
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 young children.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear logical structure by first introducing the main topic, then outlining the different points you will discuss. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, expanding on it and adding details or examples. Conclude by summarizing your main points and stating your opinion clearly once more.
task achievement
In order to achieve task response, you must clearly answer the question posed and stay on topic throughout your essay. State your opinion explicitly, support your arguments with relevant examples, and provide a conclusion that reflects your views.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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