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Band 4.5

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your work place tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this ?

Organizing and neatness
is
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 vital to
success
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 things in
life
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. Some
have
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believe,
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people
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that people
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 need to keep their
house
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houses
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 and
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office
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offices
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 organized and clean. I think it is
crutial
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crucial
critical
 to have
a
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an
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 unstressful
life
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. I totally agree with
this
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 opinion and I will explain the reason
in
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the
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apply
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further
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.
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 with, we can highlight the major advantage
as
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of
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time
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 saving.
Well organized
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people
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 have spare
time
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 to enjoy their
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life
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lives
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while
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 others
complaining
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complain
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time
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 is not enough to
done
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do
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 their work.
For example
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, as a working
mom
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mom,
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 she need to balance two part of her
life
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, one is
work
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her work
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life
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 other one is
personal
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her personal
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life
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. If she is unable to organize her
day
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 she will fail end of the
day
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.
However
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, if she
manage
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manages
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 her
day
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 well and
clean
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cleans
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 the places will help her to spend a
worth
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good
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day
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.
On the other hand
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, cleaning is
main
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a main
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 important part of every
individuals
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individual's
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life
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 because your
work
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workplace
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place
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 and apartment cleaning will help you to save
your
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apply
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time
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 and stay
hygine
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hygienic
. It includes keeping
thing
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things
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 in
correct
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the correct
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place
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 and
dust free
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dust-free
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.
To
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For
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 instance, if you
could not
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cannot
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 find the keys in the morning it leads to going
late
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too late
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 to
office
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. If you neglect
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this small things
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this small thing
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 in
you
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your
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life
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 you will hesitate the whole lifetime.
Moreover
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, not
organize
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being organised
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 and
untidy
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being untidy
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 are
main
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the main
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 reasons for
stressfull
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stressful
worklife
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work
. Many
people
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 suffer from
thier
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their
 jobs because of their not neat.
For example
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, some
office
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 tables
have
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are
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 full of documents when they want to find some
document
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documents
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 they have to go through all the papers. It waste employee
time
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 and sometimes document is
missed
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missing
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place
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.
However
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,
this
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 would affect your promotions and
increaments
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increases
 in the future. In conclusion,
people
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 want to improve their organizing
skill
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skills
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 from
thier
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their
 childhood,
this
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 is
most
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the most
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 significant fact
for
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in
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 their
life
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.
Poeple
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People
 mostly spend their
time
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 in either
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office
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the office
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 or
home
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at home
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 so, if it is
messy
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the messy
a messy
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place
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people
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 will
overwhelm
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be overwhelmed
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their
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in their
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life
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lives
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. To have a successful
carreer
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career
 and
happy
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a happy
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life
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eveyone
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everyone
 should organized.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Productivity
  • Distractions
  • Organized
  • Clutter
  • Stress levels
  • Professionalism
  • Creativity
  • Inspiration
  • Flexibility
  • Spontaneity
  • Personal preference
  • Cultural perspective
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