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The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
The given line chart illustrates the variety of the total
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fiber
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 needs in the world during the period between 1980 to 2015. In general, the statistical data of
demand
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 had increased for several
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fiber
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fibre
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 types.
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, the
demand
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of
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wool
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 needs had more lowest
value
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 than other textile types. In terms of several
fiber
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 types
increase
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such
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 as Polyester, Cotton, and Cellulosic,
where
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the start point was approximately 5, 14, and 3
in
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million
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tons
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 of total
fiber
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demand
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, respectively.
Furthermore
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, the Polyester had significantly increased
reached
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 69
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 2015. Followed by, Cotton had the highest start point in 1980 but the
value
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 of account of
fiber
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 needs fluctuated
value
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, which the account of only reached 32
million
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tons
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. Regarding the lowest
demand
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of
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fiber
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fibre
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 textile was
a
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wool
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wool
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, we can see that the number of
wool
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 interested in 1980 reached 2
million
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tons
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.
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, the pattern of
wool
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had
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increased until 2000,
it
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when it
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 reached
until
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5
million
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 tonnes.
Moreover
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, the
wool
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 needs in the world after 2000 decreased until 2015, when the
value
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 was close to 0
million
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tons
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiber, demand, wool, value, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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