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the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040

the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The given graph demonstrates the total population of citizens of the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia in a 50-year period
in addition
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 to the prediction for 2030 and 2040. As a whole, all four Asian countries had a rising trend particularly, Malaysia which is dominant.
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, Indonesia started out with the lowest rate and climbed dramatically through the years and reached 60 per
cent
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.
According to
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 the data, the Philippines had some fluctuation and had the same percentage as Malaysia in 1070 and 1900, with 30 and almost 50 per
cent
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 respectively.
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, its trend changed and had a low of 10 per
cent
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. Again, the number of dwellers in
this
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 country increased steadily and reached 50 per
cent
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. It is predicted that the rise will continue in the future. Moving on to the next country, Thailand had the same number of residents in 1970, with 10 per
cent
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 but it could not rise as sharply as the Philippines and had the lowest rate with only 30 per
cent
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 in 2020.
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, its trend will be rising in the future.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • rural-urban migration
  • economic development
  • industrialization
  • infrastructure strain
  • environmental impacts
  • social challenges
  • urban planning
  • government policies
  • housing policies
  • public services
  • trend analysis
  • prediction
  • initiatives
  • urban growth management
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