The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the
number
of
incidents
such
as
burglary
,
car
theft
, and robbery that occurred from 2003 to 2012. The
number
of robbed people was approximately steady every
year
and was the least case among all
cases
. The
number
of
burglary
incidents
dropped significantly from 2004 to 2008
while
the
number
of
car
theft
incidents
remained high and were the most violence-case from 2007 to 2012. The deviation between robbery case and
car
theft
case were stable
year
by
year
which were around 2000
cases
. Meanwhile, the
number
of
burglary
cases
in 2008 was one-third the
number
of
incidents
in 2003 and had an unstable fluctuation until 2012. Since there was a big drop in
burglary
cases
, it was obvious that
car
theft
cases
excelled since 2007. The
number
of robbed people remained stable which was under 1000
cases
every
year
. In 2012
car
theft
cases
excelled,
while
burglary
cases
got second place and robbery
cases
on
last
place and the
number
of
incidents
were 2400, 1400, and 600 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, incidents, burglary, car, theft, year, cases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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