The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graph illustrates the average proportion of nutrients, which can be harmful
for
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people's health, consumed
in
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the
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breakfast, lunch,
snacks
and
dinner
in the United States.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the proportion of
sodium
and saturated fat are normally consumed in
dinner
,
while
added
sugar
are
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highly consumed in
snacks
.
Also
, all these nutrients are consumed in lower
quantity
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quantities
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in breakfasts.
Sodium
and saturated fat are mostly consumed at
dinner
, with 43% and 37% respectively, and approximately one-fourth of added
sugar
was consumed
in
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dinner
.
Snacks
with added
sugar
are highly consumed in the United
Stated
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States
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with 42%,
while
only 21% of
satured
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saturated
fat and 14% of
sodium
are consumed in the
snacks
. Fewer
amount
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amounts
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of these nutrients are consumed in breakfast, but with
similar
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a similar
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proportion; 16% for both added
sugar
and saturated fat and 14%
in
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sodium
.
Finally
,
sodium
and saturated fat are normally consumed at
lunch time
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lunchtime
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, with 29% and 26% respectively, and only 19% of added
sugar
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, dinner, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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